Tuesday, February 5, 2013

Metaphor Poem

I am like a silverman street performer
Quiet, but yet trying to make people laugh
Unfazed with anything that comes my way
And seriously composed

Always energetic at night
And out when the stars shine bright
Being friendly and dependent is the way I live
Relying on people to give,
But my talent makes people laugh
It is my art and craft

Mellow in the day, 
But energetic at night
I am like a silverman 
So here I stand

1 comment:

  1. You may want to try and revise the second and third stanza. For
    example, you could say "Unfazed by obstacles that come my way" (You
    really don't have to put that. It's just an example). I like the way
    you structured your poem by rhyming in some parts. I also liked it
    when you actually described yourself as a mellow person because that
    is the truth. You are very mellow. Overall, I think the metaphor
    you've chosen for yourself is not a bad one!

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