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 KC3 Final Draft

      Over the past years in Hawaii we were ranked the worst in the nation for traffic. Proposing rail, some would think will help decrease traffic but, the rail wont help our traffic problems at all. The rail production would waste billions of dollars, ruin ancient Hawaiian burials along the proposed route, the maintenance would be horrible, and it wouldn’t benefit us.

 

     The rail wouldn’t benefit Hawaii in anyway. It would only decrease traffic by 1.3 percent. What about the other 98 percent? That’s majority of the cars on the road so building rail is a waste of time and energy. Also the rail is just going to ruin  Hawaii’s landscape and make us not unique. Why would a beautiful tropical island getaway want a big oversized rail system that would take away the natural beauty? We wouldn’t be unique because the mainland has these rail systems and they want to come here for vacation because Hawaii is different. They do not want to come here for something that looks like where they came from. Also we wouldn’t even know how much people would even ride the rail. If we don’t even have a good estimate on people that would ride it then we are practically building the rail for nothing. Even if people ride the rail they wouldn’t have the freedom to go anywhere because the rail only goes to certain locations. So if people want there freedom to drive anywhere they want and not ruin our beautiful island the rail wouldn’t benefit Hawaii in anyway. Besides this we haven’t even mentioned how much money the rail would cost!

     The rail would waste billions of dollars. We could be spending the money for teachers and schools to provide an education instead of focusing so much on transportation. It is also just going to waste 5.2 billion dollars and will increase our taxes. Even for the people that are not going to ride it, they still have to pay for it. Paying for the rail would also almost run Hawaii bankrupt. They say that it only is going to cost 5.2 billion dollars as an estimate but it would really cost about 7 billion dollars as a final pay. Add that cost to the $5 billion the city has to spend for the sewer upgrades, and the hundreds of millions to bring our water system up to speed, and we may either go bankrupt or raise taxes. Plus we would have to maintain the rail. What makes you think that we would keep up with the maintenance problems. We can’t even maintain the potholes on out roads. We couldn’t even survey the land correctly to start building the rail.

     Along the 20 mile route a ancient Hawaiian burial hotspot would be ruined. The Hawaii Supreme Court had to stop the construction because city didn’t complete the archeological survey. This is absurd because they were not even aware of what was in their way of their construction site. The rail would just be ruining a ancient Hawaiian burial. The hawaiians we here first so they should get their land back and we should not ruin it. Being lazy the city decided to conduct the archeological inventory in four phases, rather than surveying the entire 20-mile route before starting the project. We can’t just mess around with the land like that and just decide to dig anywhere. If we are going to build rail we need to be serious about it a complete legal matters. 

     Hawaii is a beautiful tropical getaway for many. But if we invest al we have in rail it wouldn't benefit us at all. It would take away the natural beauty and the site seeings that Hawaii has to offer, ruin ancient Hawaiian burials, and would just waste 5.2 billion dollars. This isn't the way Hawaii should be, this is not pono (the right way of living).

KC3 Rough Draft

     Over the past years in Hawaii we were ranked the worst in the nation for traffic. Proposing rail, some would think will help decrease traffic but, I think that the rail wont help our traffic problems at all. The rail production would waste billions of dollars, ruin ancient Hawaiian burials along the proposed route, the maintenance would be horrible, and it wouldn’t benefit us.

     

     The rail wouldn’t benefit Hawaii in anyway. It would only decrease traffic by 1.3 percent. What about the other 98 percent? That’s majority of the cars on the road so I think that building rail is a waste of time and energy. Also the rail is just going to ruin  Hawaii’s landscape and make us not unique. Why would a beautiful tropical island getaway want a big oversized rail system that would take away the natural beauty? We wouldn’t be unique because the mainland has these rail systems and they want to come here for vacation because Hawaii is different. They do not want to come here for something that looks like where they came from. Also we wouldn’t even know how much people would even ride the rail. If we don’t even have a good estimate on people that would ride it then we are practically building the rail for nothing. Even if people ride the rail they wouldn’t have the freedom to go anywhere because the rail only goes to certain locations. So if people want there freedom to drive anywhere they want and not ruin our beautiful island the rail wouldn’t benefit Hawaii in anyway. Besides this we haven’t even mentioned how much money the rail would cost! 

     The rail would waste billions of dollars. We could be spending the money for teachers and schools to provide an education instead of focusing so much on transportation. It is also just going to waste 5.2 billion dollars and will increase our taxes. Even for the people that are not going to ride it, they still have to pay for it. Paying for the rail would also almost run Hawaii bankrupt. They say that it only is going to cost 5.2 billion dollars as an estimate but it would really cost about 7 billion dollars as a final pay. Add that cost to the $5 billion the city has to spend for the sewer upgrades, and the hundreds of millions to bring our water system up to speed, and we may either go bankrupt or raise taxes. Plus we would have to maintain the rail. What makes you think that we would keep up with the maintenance problems. We can’t even maintain the potholes on out roads. We couldn’t even survey the land correctly to start building the rail.

     Along the 20 mile route a ancient Hawaiian burial hotspot would be ruined. The Hawaii Supreme Court had to stop the construction because city didn’t complete the archeological survey. This is horrible because they were not even aware of what was in their way of their construction site. The rail would just be ruining a ancient Hawaiian burial. The hawaiians we here first so they should get their land back and we should not ruin it. Being lazy the city decided to conduct the archeological inventory in four phases, rather than surveying the entire 20-mile route before starting the project. We can’t just mess around with the land like that and just decide to dig anywhere. If we are going to build rail we need to be serious about it a complete legal matters. 

     Overall, I think that we shouldn’t get the rail because it wouldn’t decrease traffic, the rail production would waste billions of dollars, ruin ancient Hawaiian burials along the proposed route, the maintenance would be horrible, and it wouldn’t benefit us. We should have a say on it because it’s our money and we would have to be paying for it through taxes even if we don’t want it.

Querencia Final 

It was a very rough school year. Filled with drama, fights, and mixed emotions. I couldn't handle it anymore. I wanted to scream my lungs out into a pillow so the sound was muffled. I was searching for happiness, but I just couldn't find that special place.  


During my summer break I traveled everywhere on Oahu. We went to the beach, the mall, hiking, but nothing felt right. I wish I had a GPS that would just lead me to it. I would just lay in my room thinking what place makes me calm and happy. I wanted a special place that is just me and peace.


     One day I remember my dad asking me to help cut the leaves off the hibiscus plant in the backyard. It was getting a little late after we were done. I was admiring the good work  I did and how the plants looked. When my dad left to go put the materials away I started playing fetch with my dog. I kicked the ball and looked up to see how fast she got the ball. There it was. My special place. It was perfect. A beautiful view of everything from Sand Island to Pearl Harbor.

     
     As a watched the sun go down in my backyard, it soothed me and makes me go clueless on what is going on in life. The down setting sun glistens as the last streaks of light fade away. As it faded all I could see was the brightest stars in the whole world. They were
 sparkling really, like a diamond in the sky. As I examine the stars to try and make 
a constellation, a cool brisk breeze brushes my face. That breeze knocked everything out of me 
and made me forget about everything. Just me and beautiful mother nature bonding. I could also see Pearl Harbor and just imagine how everything was back then during the war. I was so thankful that I lived where I live today and that my special place is right in my backyard. 
A place that I will cherish forever.


     From then on I go there and just sit on the old ancient brick wall and sit to calm me down and get away from the world around me. I couldn't believe that my special place was right before my eyes. My backyard. This was my home destination to peace and happiness.

    

Rough Draft

 It was a very rough school year. Filled with drama, fights, and mixed emotions. I couldn't handle it anymore. I wanted to scream my lungs out into a pillow so the sound was 

muffled. I was searching for happiness, but i just couldn't find that special place.  

During my summer break I traveled everywhere on Oahu. We went to the beach, the mall, hiking, but nothing felt right. I would just lay in my room thinking what place makes me calm and happy. I wanted a special place that is just me and peace.

     One day I remember my dad asking me to help cut the leaves off the hibiscus plant in the backyard. It was getting a little late after we were done. I was admiring the good work  I did and how the plants looked. When my dad left to go put the materials away I started playing with my dog fetch. I kicked the ball and looked up to see how fast she got the ball. There it was. My special place. It was perfect.

     

     As a watch the sun go down in my backyard, it soothes me and makes me go clueless on what is going on in life. The down setting sun glistens as the last streaks of light fade away. As it fades all I could see was the brightest stars in the whole world. They were
 sparkling really, like a diamond in the sky. As I examine the stars to try and make 
a constellation, a cool brisk breeze brushes my face. That breeze knocked everything out of me 
and made me forget about everything. Just me and beautiful mother nature bonding. 
,This was my happy place. One that I will cherish forever.

     From then on I go there and just sit on the old ancient brick wall and sit to calm me down and get away from the world around me. I couldn't believe that my special place was right before my eyes. My backyard. This was my home destination to peace and happiness.

As a watch the sun go down in my backyard, it soothes me and makes me go clueless
on what is going on in life. The down setting sun glistens as the last streaks of light fade
away. As it fades all i could see was the brightest stars in the whole world. They were
sparkling really, like a diamond in the sky. As I examine the stars to try and make a
object, a cool brisk breeze brushes my face. That breeze knocked everything out of me
and made me forget about everything. Just me and beautiful mother nature bonding.
This was my happy place. One that I will cherish forever.

Final Draft

Tyler Shimogawa
                            August 15,2012

Shimogawa's New Years Tradition

     It was New Years Eve when everyone was gathered as a big Ohana. But this New Year celebration was different. My soccer team came over. After a hard years work of soccer and school my family wanted to bring everyone together that was special to us. We anxiously waited until the clock turned to 12 a.m. when it was going to be a New Year. Every second was dreadful and felt like eternity. When I would play with fireworks I would feel like a little kid playing on the playground having the time of my life. 5,4,3,2,1! "Happy New Years!" I lit the 10,000 firecracker. On this cold New Years Eve the fireworks gave us warmth and made us feel nice and cozy.  It felt like sitting by a campfire while snuggling in a soft blanket."Sizzle,Pack,Boom!" As the noises of fireworks echo in our neighborhood and as the noises ring in our ears, the fireworks lit up the sky just like the bright glistening sun

     The time has come. We all ran into the house. As we dashed in, boom! It punched me right in my face. The savory smell of my families "Traditional New Years Soba." Soba is a type of Japanese noodles. As we all got a steaming hot bowl, well dug in. First I took a spoonful of the broth. Sluuurp! The broth was a savory mouthful of joy. My throat was a little bit sore from all of the smoke and powder inhaled, so the broth soothed my throat to the dearest perfection.

     After we demolished the whole ginormous pot of the soba, I couldn't get over how delicious and mouth watering it was. Something about the amazing combination of charsiu, siamin noodles, soba noodles, fish cake, and the delightful broth comes together so well to make a delicious tradition. Even if it's not New Years I still crave this dish throughout the whole year. I can just imagine the steam roaming through the air and the savory broth satisfying my taste buds. The most amazing dish ever.

     This dish was not only special to me but to my whole family. This dish goes way back from my dads Japanese heritage. When he was a kid he always ate this dish on New Years with his family. Soon later when my dad and my mom got married, my mom adapted to this tradition and never missed one New years. My dad ate this because he believed this dish gave you good luck and a longer life.

     As the party wrapped up and everyone was saying their goodbyes, I was pooped and exhausted I took a bath and knocked out. I fell asleep like a baby. But boy did I have fun. That was the best New Years ever because I got to spend it with the people I love and my friends and neighbors. Something I will never forget. Hopefully we can do it again next year.

Roots and Recipes 2nd Draft

Tyler Shimogawa

                            August 15,2012

 Shimogawa's New Year Tradition 

     It was New Years Eve when everyone was gathered as a big Ohana. But this New Year celebration was different. My soccer team came over. After a hard years work of soccer and school my family wanted to bring everyone together that was special to us. We anxiously waited until the clock turned to 12 a.m. when it was going to be a New Year. Every second was dreadful and felt like eternity. When I would play with fireworks I would feel like a little kid playing on the playground having the time of my life. 5,4,3,2,1! "Happy New Years!" I lit the 10,000 firecracker. On this cold New Years Eve the fireworks gave us warmth and made us feel nice and cozy.  It felt like sitting by a campfire while snuggling in a soft blanket."Sizzle,Pack,Boom!" As the noises of fireworks echo in our neighborhood and as the noises ring in our ears, and as the fireworks lit up the sky just like the sun.

     The time has come. We all ran into the house. As we dashed in, boom! It punched me right in my face. The savory smell of my families "Traditional New Years Soba." Soba is a type of Japanese noodles. As we all got a steaming hot bowl, well dug in. First I took a spoonful of the broth. Sluuurp! The broth was a savory mouthful of joy. My throat was a little bit sore from all of the smoke and powder inhaled, so the broth soothed my throat to the dearest perfection.

     After we demolished the whole ginormous pot of the soba, I couldn't get over how delicious and mouth watering it was. Something about the amazing combination of charsiu, siamin noodles, soba noodles, fish cake, and the delightful broth comes together so well to make a delicious tradition. Even if it's not New Years I still crave this dish throughout the whole year.

     This dish was not only special to me but to my whole family. This dish goes way back from my dads Japanese heritage. When he was a kid he always ate this dish on New Years with his family. Soon later when my dad and my mom got married, my mom adapted to this tradition and never missed one New years. My dad ate this because he believed this dish gave you good luck and a longer life.

     As the party wrapped up and everyone was saying their goodbyes, I was pooped and exhausted I took a bath and knocked out. I fell asleep like a baby. But boy did I have fun. That was the best New Years ever because I got to spend it with the people I love and my friends and neighbors. Something I will never forget. Hopefully we can do it again next year.

Tyler Shimogawa
                            August 15,2012

Shimogawa's New Years Tradition

     It was New Years Eve when everyone was gathered as a big Ohana. But this New Year celebration was different. My soccer team came over. After a hard years work of soccer and school my family wanted to bring everyone together that was special to us. We anxiously waited until the clock turned to 9 p.m, when we could start playing with fireworks. Every second was dreadful and felt like eternity. When I would play with fireworks I would feel like a little kid playing on the playground having the time of my life.

     "Guys hurry up and get outside, it's 9 o'clock!" As my friend screamed to the top of his lungs to get out side we dashed out. The party has begun. As we lit the first firework, I felt like we brought some life to the place. On this cold New Years Eve the fireworks gave us warmth and made us feel nice and cozy.  It felt like sitting by a campfire while snuggling in a soft blanket."Sizzle,Pack,Boom!" As the noises of fireworks echo in our neighborhood and as the noises ring in our ears, and as the fireworks lit up the sky just like the sun , the time has came. 5,4,3,2,1! "Happy New Years!" I lit the 10,000 firecracker.

     The time has come. We all ran into the house. As we dashed in, boom! It punched me right in my face. The savory smell of my families "Traditional New Years Soba." Soba is a type of Japanese noodles. As we all got a steaming hot bowl, well dug in. I was glad everyone loved it because my dad said to me "it's a tradition because the noodles is suppose to give you long life and good blessings. " Something about this wonderful mixture of soba noodle,saimin noodles,green onions, charsiu,and the broth was amazing. The broth soothed our throats and the noodles filled our stomachs.

     As the party wrapped up and everyone were saying there goodbyes I was pooped and exhausted I took a bath and knocked out. But boy did I have fun. That was the best New Years ever because I got to spend it with the people I love and my friends and neighbors. Something I will never forget. Hopefully we can do it again next year.

Roots and Recipes Brainstorm :)

1. The food I will be describing is a New Years Good Luck Soba.

2. A special memory was when my whole soccer team came over to my house for new years. My soccer team, my family members, and neighbors were all gathered and ate the "Good Luck" Soba to bring good fortune and blessings for the new year.

3. Imagery, Personification, onomatopoeia

4. My Mother :)